Of the Beholder

Of the Beholder

Posing in the sparkling purple dress
She pouts to the mirror,
Flashes a flippant smile
and tosses her hair over her shoulder

Chattering incessantly
The dress-up continues
Her lashes soon veil her eyes
In “pretty” swirls of pinks and blues

If asked whether she’s lonely she point to her shelf:
Each stuffed animal has a name
Oft forgotten – not that it fazes her -
They just change from day to day

When asked what she dreams about
She clicks her attention back to you
Hesitates half a second
Then babbles about leprechauns  and horseshoes

On inquiry about the clouds on her drawings
Of  flowers and fairy wings
She replies simply, “They’re not clouds,
They’re soapsuds on kitestrings.”

*Hm, somethng is very definitely missing, but I dont know what. Please offer critique (even criticism is welcome); I really need to figure out what is lacking in this piece.
As you see, I’ve kept my word and am posting again :) Hope you all are well.*

~ by cravingoxygen on March 3, 2009.

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5 Responses to “Of the Beholder”

  1. Its a bit of Alice in Wonderland and Im sure Lewis Carrol would like this, just as I..But you be hard on your self just as all great writers are….hehehehehe I know I know I know

    bindo said this on March 3, 2009 at 10:20 pm

  2. thanks craving :)
    i’ll get out there (very) soon with the night photography

    maybe the part that you feel is missing, is the part she’s missing of herself
    i think what’s left unsaid leaves the mind to wonder about, does she know who she really is(?)

    xo

    chloë said this on March 4, 2009 at 1:11 am

  3. lol, thank you Bindo. For lack of any better theories, I’m going to be sticking by your and Chloe’s assessments of the situation. Thank you for the feedback :)
    MA

    cravingoxygen said this on March 4, 2009 at 9:01 pm

  4. it was just a (not so) subtle way of saying “i’m not playing the games, i’m above that..so go away”
    :)

    that photograph was of my myspace :) i’m hoping the weather here improves (it’s cold & raining) because paige & i have a date saturday night with night photography :) :)
    will keep you posted xo

    chloë said this on March 5, 2009 at 12:46 am

  5. Hey you.

    I deleted all the poems that are in the book cause ya know, I wanted people to buy it….But for you dear MA, consider it done. Send me an email at komiclife@gmail.com and then I’ll send you the poems you requested in attachment..Actualy, I’m touched by the request..Thank you

    Bindo

    bindo said this on March 5, 2009 at 3:02 am

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