JR491022
JR491022
Dirt on the windows that
fleck colour on your arms
like the clouds pooling shadow
over crop-ridden farms
White stippled on the black as
constant as the childish scrawl
marring the car ceiling
from drives too-dark and too-long
Cerulean haze
-from turning closed eyes to the sun
’till the lids bake warm, see red -
haloes all and none
Shreds of Pick ‘n Pay bags
snared by the wing on barbwire;
tattered plastic fingers
clenched around beguiling steel wire
Hours of tracing pinkie-tips
over the numbers in the window’s bottom right
as though they would perhaps,
somehow, disclose the answer in the headlights
*Powercuts are my greatest bane, I tell you. I am suffering from withdrawals from not being online enough this week. *grins* Terribly sorry, but it really was no choice of mine. Um… the numbers from the title aren’t the real ones yet, lol, I still need to go get them from the car, but it’s getting serviced atm, so you’ll have to wait until tomorrow. Hope you enjoyed 
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*edit, the right number is now present, lol*
“Cerulean haze” Unreal……awesome, the whole poem rocks and title sits well with my penchant for numbers..Just dig it
bindo said this on March 27, 2009 at 3:52 am
hi, i’m okay
i agree though, blogs are personal experience & if you don’t like someones blog you shouldn’t keep going back; i know i don’t
i’m trying to relax with regard to clint but it’s a struggle haha
ohh good you’ve heard waverunners, i was starting to think you were an alien
*hehe – poke*
no, no comments moaning about my post
have a lovely get-away, you lucky girl
xox
chloë said this on March 27, 2009 at 7:30 am
Long time since my last public comment , but I have appreciate the nice “street” rhythm of the second half
I feel some rhytmical influences here
Told you, didn’t I ?
I like it
Secret Adorer ;) said this on March 27, 2009 at 11:24 am
Thank you MA
Yeah, the numbers weren’t planned at all, they just appeared, lol. Inspired by you *grins*
SA: lol, I still have no idea what on earth you are talking about
. Everything there is in decent English as far as I can see. *grins* But thank you 
cravingoxygen said this on March 27, 2009 at 12:44 pm
Heya! Finally here
Everytime I read your poem I can put myself in my own imaginations thru the words you putting in, such a beautiful feeling. How’d you do that? do you have some kind of power like in those Hero’s movie? *chuckle* anyhoo… great job craving!
Hv A good weekend ahead!
*waving*
Tumbleweed said this on March 28, 2009 at 5:15 am
Hey there. I just thought I’d comment, because, it has been a long while since I’ve done so. Lol. My computer seems to be rather low on my own list of priorities lately, though I’m still reading your posts. As always, this is great. Very vivid, I can see all that you describe. Road trips are often like that, no matter where you go or where you’re at. And the way you’ve described it here, is altogether new and yet still familiar. Beautiful poem, I love it.
thesleepingtypewriter said this on March 29, 2009 at 12:53 am
you’re awesome & so is your writting
“-from turning closed eyes to the sun
’till the lids bake warm, see red -” the imagery here is incredible xo
chloë said this on March 29, 2009 at 5:29 am
I aint talkin bout the vocab giiirl, Im talking about rhytm
Word
eL said this on April 1, 2009 at 6:00 pm
Wonderful imagery as ever. “Cerulean haze”. Penetrating.
Jan Freeman said this on April 4, 2009 at 11:44 am
i approved all my comments via email on friday at work & didn’t honestly, even read them
i feel terrible now because i wasn’t able to reply sooner <3
i really hope you’re okay(!) i’ve edited your comment
i’m always always here for you & i’m not going to hell at you hun xox
chloë said this on April 5, 2009 at 2:14 am
i hope you’re okay xoxxx
chloë said this on April 6, 2009 at 10:21 am
-gasp-
travis changed his layout but no update yet? hmmm?
tunefulwords said this on April 7, 2009 at 6:44 am
i really really hope you’re okay
i’m starting to really worry
xo
chloë said this on April 9, 2009 at 2:29 am
Well hi stranger! How have you been? I hope all is well. I’m sorry that I haven’t been around in a while. It’s good to see that you are still writing amazing poetry. I just put up a new post and I would appreciate your input on it when you get a minute! Just to warn you ahead of time, some of it is pretty brash and harsh. I don’t want to offend you in any way, but I’ve written and posted much more offensive poetry so I don’t think you are going to have a problem with it. I hope you like it… Personally I love it. I think it’s one of my favorites so far. I’ve been so busy worth work, school, and my son that I forgot how good it felt to write something that you are 100% proud of and have a passion for. Some of it is kinda cruel, but it is very real and I put alot of time, thought, and emotion into it. If you can’t feel my pain then I did something wrong. I think that the power of my words comes through very intensive. I hope you enjoy and keep up the great writing. I promise I’ll be around more so don’t be a stranger. Later on…
Shady said this on April 16, 2009 at 7:13 am
come back
i miss you terribly
chloë said this on May 4, 2009 at 1:54 pm
oh my gosh you don’t know how good it was to read your comments!!! <3
i’m on limited time but i’ll reply to you & read your new entry asap xox
chloë said this on May 21, 2009 at 11:35 pm