Complex Simplicity
Complex Simplicity
Dull light filtering in through a window framed the withered woman. Bony fingers pushed and pulled a needle through a dress that was more patch than material. Milky eyes flitted about the dingy room; never focused, never seeing. A melody slipped subtly into the room. Giggling mischievously, the melody crept forward and sat at the woman’s swollen feet, brushing back a tambourine bang. All was silent. Without warning, the song sprang up and enveloped the woman with laughter-bells and xylophone-eyes. The song slowed down momentarily as she planted a flute-like kiss on the wrinkled cheek and then skipped out, leaving the woman smiling and shuffling to the window for her first taste of wind in years.
The music skittered down the streets, leaping lightly over the cracks and protruding bricks. A smear of children caught her attention and she quickly mingled into the laughter and excitement that ensued with every new marble game. The bright little balls glistened like jawbreakers and clicked as they scurried along the ridges and valleys in the road. The tune watched in awe and started mimicking their clacks with her drums. Delighted at the result, she twirled further down the street, reveling in the beat of the sun on her back and the dust eddying around her ankles.
Rainbow houses peeled from the pavement and elbowed each other jokily as they compared cracks and paint coats in much the same way as little boys brag about their latest wounds. Women with long skirts, chapped heels and calloused palms adorned the steps and window sills, chattering and calling to each other like a mismatched flock of sparrows and hadidas. Fascinated at the sound, the melody worked the harsh voices into her linings and, when satisfied with her handiwork, she pirouetted further into the district.
Raucous hoots and snorts of drunken laughter sounded from down the road and the song went to investigate. Here, a pub, run-down barbershop and a café’ were sardined together, people spilling from their doors. Beers sloshed around in mugs, spillages of the golden liquid unheeded amidst the rambunctious singing and jeering. The music gaily joined the ranks and allowed her rhythm to lull the day’s worries out of the men’s’ tired bones. Noticing a silver-headed man slip out along a side-door, the song followed him quietly.
As the melody tip-tapped after the man, she skillfully weaved the sun winking out from behind the Lion’s Head around the staccato beads in her bangles. As shadows overtook Tablebay, lamps and candles sleepily flickered awake and cast glimmers into the streets. The song could vaguely make out two entwined figures bathed in the shadows of an alley. The melody smiled and softly braided their blushing, breathless kisses into her hair. The melody melted back into the shadows of the city. She was the music, the life – the pulse – of the city.
*So yeah. This is what I have been dedicating all my energy to. This, Rae and the newspaper. *grins* I’m quite of short of writing time atm, but I will have to start making a plan. And thank you so much for all your comments 🙂 I’m sorry I haven’t been replying to them, but I am about to go do so now :P. Oh, before I forget… this is about District Six. It’s an area in South Africa that was demolished due to Apartheid and the idiots in power back then. It was mainly inhabited by freed slaves, artisans, artists and other people who couldn’t afford to live anywhere else. Tablebay is where it was and the Lion’s Head is one of the mountains that you can see from there. And yes, I did coin the title from a phrase in one of my other poems :)*

Great flow, excellent visuals and of course, cool voice…
Dig your expanding efforts!
Bindo
Bindo said this on February 1, 2009 at 5:46 pm
Wow, how on earth do you always manage to reply so quickly? *grins* You always comment within a few hours. I’m loving it though 🙂
And thank you.
Mutual A
cravingoxygen said this on February 1, 2009 at 6:49 pm
i’m breatheless & speechless! when is more of rae coming by the way(?)
check your email sapphire123456789@hotmail.com i sent you an emial regarding my new entry i want you to read it
chloé said this on February 2, 2009 at 10:14 am
Captivating – as if one was transported to the location 🙂
islephilosopher said this on February 2, 2009 at 7:46 pm
jealously definitely isn’t her good side lol. i think your comment was the most mature minded & level headed comment i’ve heard in a while. thankyou so much you’ve really help put this into perspective; that was something i needed.
(i’m also glad you total get what i was talking about & understand & also agree that i’m not doing anything wrong)
i have left it alone & writing privately was the smartest thing i’ve done in a long time; i’m growing up & one of my new years resolutions was to not play into her games, i’m actually proud of myself : )
i have blocked her from my site, she’s spam but you still have to manually delete spam which is annoying. : ) ♥ xox
chloé said this on February 2, 2009 at 11:26 pm
i just read your comment again *smiles warmly*
(i’m sorry for another spider photograph)
the grasshopper thingie had such interesting wings and body
i sat in my garden, bark all over my legs and butt; just playing with him, moving his wings lol
(he was dead by the way..)
♥
p.s don’t be sorry for the long comment!
chloé said this on February 3, 2009 at 7:13 am
Wonderful story – it jingles. Gives new meaning to the phrase “Music makes the world go around” 🙂
Jan Freeman said this on February 4, 2009 at 10:43 am
Thanks, Jan 🙂
cravingoxygen said this on February 4, 2009 at 8:42 pm
Mesmerizing.
If you never write a full on book, I will be sorely disappointed.
I was absolutely hooked by the second sentence. You entirely captured the heart of it, and in making the wind a melody, so playful and full of love and fascination for every thing, well. My eyes are still wide. This is absolutely fantastic. I love it. Beautiful, skillful, mesmerizing. 😀
thesleepingtypewriter said this on February 16, 2009 at 1:01 am
Oh, this answers my previous question. I see you’re Capetownian. I studied in Cape Town (UCT) for 5 years, and recently moved to Jo’burg to start work — it’s always a shock to meet other South African bloggers… a good shock though 🙂
Anywhooo, this is a brilliant story, I love how you’ve captured the images and have weaved a tale that even historians wouldn’t dream of mastering. Great writing!
bomi said this on March 19, 2009 at 10:56 pm
I have a Business Science degree from there (majored in Information Systems, with honours), but really, I think I wasted my time. I’d love to go into creative writing one day, then I might at least tell stories half as good as you do.
Thank you for your lovely words on my blog, thank you for visiting.
bomi said this on March 21, 2009 at 5:04 pm
I’m glad you feel me there dear…about structure and lyrics. You’re being modest, that prose was brilliant! And that, to me, spells “terribly good”… I’m sure your readers don’t mind being victims if they get to read your work — kind of a good trade off 🙂
I work for MTN at their head offices in Fairlands.
I’d be honoured to hear your views on some of my old work… so two weeks is not insanely far 🙂 Thank you for your kind words, it’s always great to read positive feedback… it keeps me going 🙂
[I’m always elighted to read my readers’ comments… however long they are 🙂 ]
bomi said this on March 23, 2009 at 7:07 am
**delighted… typo
bomi said this on March 23, 2009 at 7:08 am